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Submission Name: thunder and lightning dots

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Author:	BloodtornAngel
ASL Info:	21/F/inyour wildest dream
Elite Ratio:	2.47 - 21/28/43
Words:	50

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	1002
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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thunder and lightning dots

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Beyond beginning and end
the heart of my friend
lies broken and trembling
waiting for answers
that cannot be given
never knowing
the true feelings
rendering a hole
so unforgiving
in this distant heart
thats so frozen
never ending
oceans
and storms of
thunder and lightning
I feel so frightened

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