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    dots Submission Name: Forgottendots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsForgottendots
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    Im walkin through a crowd of a thousand people
    All empty faces
    Bumping shoulders
    And no one to see me
    My grace has fallen
    Lost indefinite into the shadow
    Just a secret unspoken
    Vacant words under the tong
    Someone tell me right now
    Look at
    Me is this real
    Is this life that I feel?
    Tell me you can see me
    Lying upon the ground
    As they all walk over me
    Feeling broken
    Left so empty
    Is life this, how its suppose to be
    Their eyes open with no expression
    All the spoken stitched up in silence
    Has death elapsed?
    Forgetting me?
    Left in this fake reality
    No one can see me
    I am forgotten




    Submitted on 2008-09-30 14:34:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lovely piece this, you can feel the emotion there all the way throughout the poem, like this one a lot.


    Jamar2
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]


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