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    dots Submission Name: September Sylphaendots
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    Author: -Lith-Ium-
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 56/107/58
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1020
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       There's always a 'once upon a'... something.


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    dotsSeptember Sylphaendots
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    Once upon a grey September -
    Day,
    Yes, I remember -
    Oh, but no, I will not 'say',
    For sweet flowers in decay,
    Might make my weak heart surrender...
    And I always run away...


    ...from the light, the ghastly phantom -
    Of the night,
    Dreaming at random,
    Just a fictional delight-
    Watching a sweet angel's flight.
    I'm the one, the one who made them...


    ...made them wish, made them desire -
    My sweet thrill -
    Now flames and fire
    And I want you, and I feel... -
    And my tears, my dear, cruel liar...
    And I'd wish you'd take me higher.
    Can't be free, unless... until...


    ...Until... I'm ashes, once again -
    Remember?
    Now a lost refrain...
    Of a sweet September
    Day.




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      This piece had a nice flow and I really liked the first stanza.

    This had a lot of saddness to it.

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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