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Time for me to go


Author: grimmreaper
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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it was a painful exsperince. i love my frind


Time for me to go



I have decided
that its time to move on
and let go of you.

I know that you may fall
without me there
holding you up
with the strengh of my asteem,
in the middle of this ocean
but I must pull away
before it is to late.

Before I get to caught in
and drown with you
in this ocean
of pain
and misery

I have held you up
for as long as I was able
using every bitter drag of strengh
that I had inside of me.

But its time for me to go.

It was fun while it lasted,
tiring and exsaughsting,
excighting and thrilling
and at the same time
mentaly draining and confusing.

But the party is over
its time for me to part,
and so,
I take my hand
and let you go.
Swimming away back into the world,
away from you.

And as each stroke I take,
leading me farther and farther
away from you
I hear your cries and screams
for me to come back.

And I wan't to.
Because its not easy leaving some one
that i love
in a place
only so that they can drown.

But You got your self here,
and I was only stuipid enough
to let your drag me along with you,
and now i see,
what I have gotten into
and so now,
its time for me to leave
and go back to my own life.

without you.




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  WOW..

I see why so many commented on this. I love how you used the ocean as a metaphor, how you decribed this person simply drowning if you did not stay but you have to go for you and you aren't trying to be bitter or selfish you are simply realizing now that wow this person is really dragging me down and although I love him/her I need to get my life back ... back where it belongs and needs to be.

Dang this is amazing write!!! Not too long and not too short its just perfect!!!

Jackz
| Posted on 2009-07-25 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  I feel this poem with great pain in my heart, because as i feel the words cutting me like a patient knife, slowly tempting every bit of self control i have, I realize that this time, I am not the one recieving the pain. I am not the one being used in the way this poem describes, i am the user. And knowing that hurts almost as bad or worse than being used.

And as i ramble about my pain, i want you to know that it is a beautiful sad poem. I like the way you wrote it. :)
| Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow. I totally know how that feels. Very good write! My last relationship was like that, god, brings back horrible memories. I think you could have gone slightly deeper into the emotional aspect of it. But other than that it's great. I love how you ended it. "with out you" It's almost remorseful but still slightly angry.
| Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by amanda99737 | [ Reply to This ]
  i really like this a lot i've felt like that too. the poem draws me into it and i can see it happening in my head... keep writing

p.s. thanks for the comments
| Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by StainedxBlades | [ Reply to This ]
  this was a heart breaking poem. its understandable that some times you need to let friends make thier own mistakes so they can learn from it and it achs to see them do it. Glad that you can do that, it's a hard decision to make.

Faid
| Posted on 2008-10-01 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]
  You have to sort out the grammar and spelling,its all over the place,otherwise its not so bad,I cant say I loved it but i thought it was honest at the very least,

some apects need to be expanded upon and some need to be much more subtle,if you fix it up a little this could be a decent poem

good luck

-Craig
| Posted on 2008-09-30 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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