[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Inhaledots

    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 723
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1623


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I am learning to breathe
    all over again.

    Where I choose
    to discover a kiss
    is the art of beauty,
    a kind of
    with freedom,
    a sort of
    cafe scene
    where the waitress
    is ever so polite
    and wishes me
    a happy Ramadan
    and blessings
    for my kids.

    And I'll reply
    "I don't have any, miss
    but thank you
    for considering it.
    I'd like to wish you
    and roses
    in the form
    of a tip."

    She won't argue with this.

    She'll smile
    and think back
    to a time
    when men
    only spoke with men,
    when gratitude came
    in the form of banishment
    to the kitchen
    or garden
    or loom
    with endless yarn
    to spin.

    Let me spin upon fractals,
    where situations
    become summer
    only if you will it.
    Let me open my fingers
    and tell you
    we are young
    and silly
    even to our last days
    spent coddled
    by the only ones
    who care
    to know us:
    decrepit, stinking
    of bored flesh,
    for release

    The embrace of faith
    the only deliverance,
    the only flame.

    Here, learn to breathe with me
    all over again.

    Submitted on 2008-10-01 00:40:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      ........... excellent, beautiful, and all the things I have said in previous post to your other poems are now re-affirmed, such a poignancy in your use of words, and such clarity ! Great title ! I also loved this one..... can you tell

    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      nice rhythm
    I like it's unique
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Love Can Be... written by HAVENSMITH92
    Summer written by layDsayD
    Bond written by saartha
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    Transparent written by Daniel Barlow
    Giving written by jjd
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Munyonyo written by expiring_touch




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]