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    dots Submission Name: Inhaledots
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    Author: meoww
    Elite Ratio:    6.75 - 262/258/143
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsInhaledots
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    I am learning to breathe
    all over again.


    Where I choose
    to discover a kiss
    is the art of beauty,
    a kind of
    entanglement
    with freedom,
    a sort of
    impromptu
    cafe scene
    where the waitress
    is ever so polite
    and wishes me
    a happy Ramadan
    and blessings
    for my kids.

    And I'll reply
    "I don't have any, miss
    but thank you
    for considering it.
    I'd like to wish you
    solace,
    stability
    and roses
    in the form
    of a tip."

    She won't argue with this.

    She'll smile
    and think back
    to a time
    when men
    only spoke with men,
    when gratitude came
    in the form of banishment
    to the kitchen
    or garden
    or loom
    with endless yarn
    to spin.

    Let me spin upon fractals,
    where situations
    become summer
    only if you will it.
    Let me open my fingers
    and tell you
    we are young
    and silly
    even to our last days
    spent coddled
    by the only ones
    who care
    to know us:
    decrepit, stinking
    of bored flesh,
    for release
    into

    Void.
    Insignificance.
    The embrace of faith
    the only deliverance,
    the only flame.


    Here, learn to breathe with me
    all over again.




    Submitted on 2008-10-01 00:40:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ........... excellent, beautiful, and all the things I have said in previous post to your other poems are now re-affirmed, such a poignancy in your use of words, and such clarity ! Great title ! I also loved this one..... can you tell

    col13x
    | Posted on 2008-10-15 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      nice rhythm
    I like it's unique
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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