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    dots Submission Name: Grieved to Ashes dots

    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsGrieved to Ashes dots

    Lost and lonely
    feeling to far from being empty
    berried in to deep
    feeling as if I became my own enemy
    looking into the mirror
    seeing nothing but a hallow shell
    being what they want to see
    hiding from what I was going to be
    trying so hard to start a new me
    knowing though from these dreams I'll never be free
    walking with every step heading toward nothing
    with no goal to keep
    striving on wind
    yet no breath to breathe
    filled with these worthless words that mean so very little to me
    but yet they hurt so much
    burning deep with in the skin
    melting away the soul
    eating at my bones
    the blood boils awaycharcoaling all that is hanging off the ashes
    and with a whisper of the wind
    everything that is and was
    floats away
    as dust sets in from this world
    only here in mind
    remembered by a memory
    brought back by a dream
    but all thoughts seem to fade away
    by those who would remember
    I should have been and should be, will be.

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