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    dots Submission Name: So Close, Then Again, So Fardots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSo Close, Then Again, So Fardots
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    Empty words fill my voided head making me feel hallow and yet I'm full. You were everything I was hiding from and now I can't stand to see you, everything that you made me become, a pain in my heart you became taking away what I always wanted and what I always meant to be.

    No matter how far away I am from you, inside your still killing me. When your next to me, I'm reminded all the things I've done made by you. And who feels this pain for I am the only one. Holding in so deep and so far down that I feel left alone with a pain from the choices that we made and were unseen and no matter how far away you are your still close to me.

    I'm drifting farther away from my summer days into my cold hearted winter floating deeper into the snow that covers me away from this world with a sun that burns me from the inside, all alone frozen alive with these emotions inside stuck deep within the ice nothing living but still imprinted in my mind her eyes though knowing that beauty lies.

    All the time I fall for her, foreseeing the raining skies. Slowly from deep within my heart it turns to stone making it strong against all this star dreamy child’s play but still week when I'm all alone.




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      Very nice!!!!

    Personally i believe that those who are close can never be far.... never too far.

    Have faith.
    | Posted on 2008-10-01 00:00:00 | by Ray20 | [ Reply to This ]


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