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    dots Submission Name: Why Do Angels Liedots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhy Do Angels Liedots
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    Why do angels lie
    When they fall from the sky
    Why do they know
    Just how to make you glow
    Why do angels fall
    When some days youíre not there to call
    Why canít they ever fly
    After you fail to please them
    After so hard you try
    Why do angels cry
    After they make a mistake,
    Why do they lie so itís your blame to take
    Why do they plan such great defile
    And after getting what they want they smile
    Why do angels say there bright and beautiful
    When deep inside there dark and corrupted
    Why do they feel so superior
    That your there only to fill their desire
    Why do angels lie
    Lie just to see a grown man cry
    Why
    Why do angels lie




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      this made feel like crying there are so many pointed points on this pieice of poetry
    first the feeling was being dissapointed
    in someone you love and how hurt you were
    the secound was how well it written
    | Posted on 2008-10-02 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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