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    dots Submission Name: The Sound of Settlingdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    23/M/Columbus, Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    5.3 - 207/276/228
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Sound of Settlingdots
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    Sinking ships, just wait a minute
    We can all just float away, across the atlantic
    Id drag you down with me, and wed walk without shoes
    With the crabs, and the dwellers of the great blue deep
    Theyd swim, and nip at our heels as we leave imprints in ocean bottom
    Lets go hunting for buried treasure:


    Foul sentiments, remnants from a time long past
    Taste it sweetly on your lips, the love of loss itself
    Awaken from your shelled perspective, and taste validity
    Tranquility in living quiet, bright mornings and Sunday papers.
    Suburbia, a haven of houses with complimentary colors.
    Then taste the fabled ambrosia of tempting lips and white lines,
    Swept into the sea headfirst, so quickly did you lose your footing,
    But it bothered you even less then than it does now, dirty knees well worn
    Fates ever guiding hand wrote all over your soft hued arms
    And there was a tear in the fabric of your stitchwork.


    Reality tends to be misleading, never think first without feeling
    You are now living in a new year, the clock is always ticking
    Explosions prove we are still moving, that our world is still turning
    That people are living and dieing in loud ways, for reasons larger than themselves
    That the price of breathing could still be valued by the price of loss.
    I want resolution to sweep over my old fears from a year ago
    Tell me just once, whisper in my ear underneath your breath,
    That one day, when you are half-asleep at 2am,
    You will remember the part I played in this gamble of a game
    That is the sound of settling.




    Submitted on 2008-10-01 02:07:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello.

    I can't give you an in depth analysis of this but at the same time I can't begin to explain what this means to me. The title is perfect and the content itself is the face of beauty. I'm sorry I cannot do better than this, I am a year out of practice. Thank you for sharing this. I really enjoyed it.


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