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    dots Submission Name: Elixirdots

    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 704
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1022


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    This self loathing isn't getting me too far.
    Add in some disrespect, a little disloyalty and
    a drop of sarcasm.

    It's best served cold.

    My heart
    Stopped beating long before you
    entered the picture;

    It's like one of those cliché' sayings that I
    always seem to forget.

    I need some assurance from time to time,
    that my muscles can relax and that my heart
    can start to thaw.

    I've come far enough to know that
    loving was something I once thought impossible.
    You changed that for me.

    My fingers are stained from the
    blood that's seeped from my
    knuckles, dried and clotted;
    A deep unnatural shade of red.

    It's my dis-installment of emotions
    a distraction from my worries.

    When my head rests against yours,
    all that matters,
    is that I am here
    and that I can love.

    Submitted on 2008-10-01 04:56:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wonderful poem, great ending.
    | Posted on 2012-11-17 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]
      When I clicked on this post I was sort of expecting some quenching elixir libation ambrosia of a quaff . But that's not what I got , until the end . A most satisfying conclusion . Happy trails .

    | Posted on 2010-09-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      does not do anything for me this one my dear, you are talented with words for someone so young, spread your wings a little, and try different subjects to write on am cerain you will do very well,
    will keep looking at your work, happy writing.

    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]
      i was just kinda sppeed reading by this and got shocked liek hello i had to go back and readit i love this dont why just do i love teh lines{It's like one of those cliché' sayings that I
    always seem to forget.} when i saw your age i almost fell over cant wait to read more
    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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