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    dots Submission Name: lifedots

    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 669
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    The empty frigid blackness covers me
    Filled heavily with solitary dots
    Which sprinkles into voided boundless space
    I sit with infinite eras of time
    In fear that hope has been exhausted, spent
    As its light withers, dims, and fades away
    Then languidly a silver, a glint, peaks
    Through desolated curtains of despair
    A tiny tendril gently swirls entwine
    A solf worm cozy blanket around me
    Awakening, thawing as the light’s rays
    Melt my external icy frozen shell
    Toward delighted sun I strive to reach
    And free from night’s dark shadow- I emerge

    Submitted on 2008-10-01 21:35:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that this poem is really pretty awesome, (there were some typos though-is 'silver,' actually silver or 'sliver..' I think you may have meant 'a soft, warm, cozy blanket around me' ? The rest of it is really good, I liked the beginning and the last line the best. It is a great example of hoping when things go wrong...even though it isn't very long, it's very complete. Good job,
    | Posted on 2008-11-16 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]

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