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    dots Submission Name: Almost a rainy daydots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    dotsAlmost a rainy daydots
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    Sitting in these tears
    My heart isnít just soken
    Its more then just broken
    All these scars left wide open
    Wounds so deep there never healing

    My summer is almost a rainy day
    I never wanted to see the fall anyway
    Itís becoming winter inside my soul
    Feeling the thunder roll
    I can remember the sun pour down
    In those dayís it was warm all around
    But thereís a dark cloud covering the sky
    Thereís more tears that fall then I can cry
    If I can cry

    My heart so blind and lonely
    This feeling that leaves me empty
    I may be stumbling
    Still tripping
    Why am I not dying
    Iím not dying
    It still hurts to be alive

    Itís the perfect nightmare to be dreaming
    Iíll go to close my eyes but Iím still screaming
    Save me
    Seal me up inside
    Take me to the edge of my life
    Make me feel alive
    I just want to feel alive

    My summer is almost a rainy day
    I never wanted to see the fall anyway
    Itís becoming winter inside my soul
    Feeling the thunder roll
    I can remember the sun pour down
    In those dayís it was warm all around
    But thereís a dark cloud covering the sky
    Thereís more tears that fall then I can cry
    If I can cry
    If I can cry




    Submitted on 2008-10-02 05:03:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the fact that its "almost" a rainy day.
    Instead of just 'My SOULS POURS BLOOD RAIN'
    it's just an interesting change from the norm and I like it.

    Very nice.
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    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by AwkwardAnomaly | [ Reply to This ]


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