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    dots Submission Name: All Alonedots
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    Author: DemonofHeaven
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    6.28 - 53/46/34
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 648
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1097



    Description:
       This is a metal song. It has an Evanescence kind of music to it.


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    dotsAll Alonedots
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    Verse 1
    You are all alone and out in the cold
    You can not stop thinking about how you were sold
    Is family not such a bitch
    The world such a witch
    Life is so unfair you say
    All the good has turned away
    Your heart is torn
    With your eyes all worn

    Hook
    So where do you go when you need a place to hide
    When your feeling of safeness has fallen aside
    When the people you once loved shun
    Leaving you no place to run

    Verse 2
    You can not handle it any more
    Everyday you cry and you made your heart close the door
    Hoping that then you will be protected
    Because every time you open the door you are just rejected

    No one wants you
    No one loves you
    And now someone out there is trying to find you
    Just wanting to kill you

    Hook (2x)

    It is all over now
    You can not fight that last blow
    Your time has come
    It is time for you to go down
    Your letting them take you down




    Submitted on 2008-10-02 13:01:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      These are some good lyrics. You really have a talent for writing dark/sad poetry. I admire that because that is what I write a lot of as well. The feeling in this poem is portrayed very well, and I can feel the sadness and anger in it. I know the feeling of feeling like people don't want you, like you don't mean anything to hardly anyone. I know what it feels like to have nowhere to turn when you feel like your world is falling apart. This is very well written. I don't have any real critiques except that sometimes the flow was interupted by the rather longer lines, but that's no big deal to me.
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by FlickerofHope | [ Reply to This ]


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