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Baked Syphilis and Cheesecake


Author: vampirefreak69
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Words: 134
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Baked Syphilis and Cheesecake



Their happiness is a tinny laugh
echoing through the phone line;
Brittle like stale crackers crushed
beneath red stilettos.

Unsteady as a baby taking her first steps.

Their love is as certain as Asia
before the earthquakes, and I am
Godzilla treading carefully. Walking
slowly, afraid to miss a beat.

One wrong move could create a tsunami.

Trying to tell you I'm not as nice as you
think was harder than it seems. Didn't believe
me when I said I wasn't so sweet. That's what
you like, isn't it? I tried to tell you.

I tried.

Bad intentions gone good and back to bad
again. Baked syphilis and cheesecake, I am
a treat and a disease. A fabulous disaster
you'll never forget.

But maybe you should.




Submitted on 2008-10-02 23:44:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well, I will be sure to tell my peoples to stay clear of you. Man. I dug it I must say. I really like that on line 'A fabulous disaster
you'll never forget.' Right on. Keep it up.
| Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]


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