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    dots Submission Name: Forgivenessdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 101/55/50
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsForgivenessdots
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    I go home
    go to my room
    and fall to my weekened knees.
    The man's words had swallowed my ears
    burning my blood.
    God must hate me.
    I rested my head on my joined hands
    my heart begining to weep.
    I started asking
    praying for god's forgiveness.
    I prayed for my life right through supper
    for my stomach had been filled with god's disapproval.
    If I pray enough
    I could feel god's fiery eyes stare at me
    knowing I didn't do what he had asked me to do.
    I've sinned
    forgive me
    I must be forgiven.
    Oh god
    seek for the good i do for you.
    For give me.




    Submitted on 2008-10-03 00:56:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the honestly that I like the most in this writing
    you can get a good thing out of it..
    thank you for sharing
    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by muhammed | [ Reply to This ]


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