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    dots Submission Name: sanddots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 101/55/50
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 507
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1308



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    dotssanddots
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    Her hair undone
    Across the horizon
    Stretching out
    Across the ocean
    With smoothed silk
    Waving in the wind
    Her eyes following
    Blue with the see
    Her feet
    Surrounded in sand
    Like broken glass
    I知 fallen
    /I知 fallen for you/
    Every grain
    For every time
    I want to spend
    Eternity
    In serenity
    With you
    A piece of my heart
    Weld up in dark
    You can change it
    Make it true
    /I知 fallen for you/
    Let the wind carry us away
    Drift across the cool breeze
    Feel the mist across our faces
    Will you come with me
    We値l hold hands under the waves
    Standing in the deep blue sky
    Holding you in my arms forever
    Or until the day I die
    You値l find it
    In your heart
    Where the sun
    Will rise for you
    That if I
    Should fall away
    You値l have nothing
    But a rainy day
    Let the wind carry us away
    Drift across the cool breeze
    Feel the mist across our faces
    Will you come with me?
    We値l hold hands under the waves
    Standing on the deep blue sky
    Holding you in my arms forever
    Or until the day I die




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      Wow!!!!! This is just brilliant i just love this one and it is goinvg straight onto my favourites list thanks for sharing this great write :)


    Timmy S. Edgar ゥ 2008
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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