Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: sanddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.48 - 99/55/48
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 491
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1308



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotssanddots
    -------------------------------------------


    Her hair undone
    Across the horizon
    Stretching out
    Across the ocean
    With smoothed silk
    Waving in the wind
    Her eyes following
    Blue with the see
    Her feet
    Surrounded in sand
    Like broken glass
    I知 fallen
    /I知 fallen for you/
    Every grain
    For every time
    I want to spend
    Eternity
    In serenity
    With you
    A piece of my heart
    Weld up in dark
    You can change it
    Make it true
    /I知 fallen for you/
    Let the wind carry us away
    Drift across the cool breeze
    Feel the mist across our faces
    Will you come with me
    We値l hold hands under the waves
    Standing in the deep blue sky
    Holding you in my arms forever
    Or until the day I die
    You値l find it
    In your heart
    Where the sun
    Will rise for you
    That if I
    Should fall away
    You値l have nothing
    But a rainy day
    Let the wind carry us away
    Drift across the cool breeze
    Feel the mist across our faces
    Will you come with me?
    We値l hold hands under the waves
    Standing on the deep blue sky
    Holding you in my arms forever
    Or until the day I die




    Submitted on 2008-10-03 01:01:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow!!!!! This is just brilliant i just love this one and it is goinvg straight onto my favourites list thanks for sharing this great write :)


    Timmy S. Edgar ゥ 2008
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    166383

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Suffer The Children written by poetotoe
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Tartarus written by endlessgame23
    Love written by saartha
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Day 5 written by TheStillSilence
    Reliquary of Writ written by HisNameIsNoMore
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    untitled written by ShyOne
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Cover written by saartha
    Lilitu written by endlessgame23
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Carry written by saartha
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    prison written by ShyOne
    Records I written by Raphael

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry