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    dots Submission Name: We Who Are About To Vote Salute Theedots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsWe Who Are About To Vote Salute Theedots
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    e pluribus unumbbbb

    of thee I singularly
    debate the future shocked
    by what amber waves
    in protest at the futile four
    scoreless innings ago
    I might have believed
    liberty would not perish
    from the earthenware jar
    where I kept her dreams

    ...may the farce be with us...




    Submitted on 2008-10-03 04:29:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I see you are saying that Bush has unumbbb.
    and say that he had a futile last four. Now I see you doubt your dreams and pass the folly on to us. I dare say Bush will go down in history as an able and careful leader. He has shown us not to leave the plow in field unprotected. (the plow being our freedom and the freedom of others.) Did you not know that he has aborted over a thousand terrorist attacks upon our nation ? He has not publicly gloated over them since he considers it as a vowed duty to protect. The media says other nations don't like us. If so why are there so many fighting with us as allies ?
    | Posted on 2008-11-03 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      the farce aye? this reminds me of the swchartz from damn space balls, as frightening as it is, yes.

    it really does.

    where do you keep this jar anyways that contains "her"
    dreams.

    just curious how you wouldddd put thatss in rhmytic poeticness fashion. ha.

    <3
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by APetalFallen | [ Reply to This ]
      i love how it inserts the anthems sung by the People and how that you place in the last part

    "may the farce be with us"

    beautiful these words couldnt have been written any better. i love the way it seems so hopeful yet near the end you shove the charade in "their" face.

    i wish i could say so much more to this. political poems or such aren't my strong suit though i myself have tried to place one up but then my dissidence on the subjected seemed as though i was forcing my ideals on those who read it, meaning i didn't give them much choice to find something in my poem to use as a way to retaliate on what i've written. Am i making sense? well the point being this poem has struck a nerve.

    Well Done.

    ~Nikki
    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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