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    dots Submission Name: Once Againdots
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    Author: supergirl_in_oh
    Elite Ratio:    1.65 - 29/125/56
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOnce Againdots
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    Once again I am left dazed and confused.
    Once again I am left to wonder.
    Once again I am led to believe his simple lies, That I blinded by love cannot see anymore.
    Once again I am left out in the rain on his door step after he has had his way with me.
    Once again I am thrown and tossed around like an old rag doll.
    Once again he calls me when he has nothing better to do.
    Once again I am his slave.
    Once again I feel the overwhelming hatred inside of me.
    Once again I draw my blade.
    Once again I fail to do what I wish to do.
    Once again I walk home alone in the cold and rain.
    Once again I think of him, I see his face in the rain drops, and I hear his name in the wind.
    And once again I do not know why.




    Submitted on 2008-10-03 04:46:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Honest and raw you delivered your emotions well i could feel your anger and despair... The repeatitiveness worked here in reinforcing the message you were perveying.

    Well Done

    Timmy S. Edgar 2008
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