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    dots Submission Name: Anglingdots

    Author: Glen Bowman
    ASL Info:    70 m Oz
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    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       There's an Australian TV show with a bloke who catches every kind of fish, then kisses them and lets them go. Well, not every kind I guess; he'd have trouble with that act sometimes at sea? I don't fish since my little daughters once decided it was cruel; but some days I feel like that fish-kissing fisherman anyway!

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    Had a good day:
    made a poem for a reader -
    maybe for several.
    Now I'll make one just for me.

    It's about the feel of a line
    as you feed it to the deep
    and wait,
    pretending not to care,
    and then how
    with a little twitch,
    the verseform bites
    way down there:
    the very one you set bait for,
    that very one which jumped once
    at sunrise;
    and play it in
    and play it in

    All of a long bright day
    till it laughs, finished flirting
    (permit me a mixed metaphor?
    Now it's a fish again)
    and swims into your hands,
    every single scale coruscant
    to the setting sun,

    Then you kiss it,
    let it dart away to
    wherever poems get to
    when you let them go,
    and smile in your sleep all night.

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      Didn't Steve Irwin try kissing a stingray? Not a good idea. I remember how tame the wild ocean fish were at the feeding station off the beach at Darwin. Here in New Zealand we have some giant eels, two metres long and thicker than your arm. In certain places they feed them in the river so that you can get in among them, a great crowd of slimy muscular eels. Those you could kiss if you wanted to. I like poems about the genesis of poetry. I love Ted Hughes' "The Thought Fox". I don't love your poem quite as much, but I certainly like it. I know it's only a cold blooded poem, but heck, even poems can feel pain and I wish you'd shown just a little more empathy for that metaphor on a hook. I'm sorry, I just couldn't resist a barbed comment.
    | Posted on 2009-06-13 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like informal type poetry, it lets you get a sense of who the author might be, and this guy, he seems like a happy fellow.

    'and play it in
    and play it in'

    loved the repetition there and also the [informal 'allow me...']


    I have one suggestion for the close.

    instead of smiling before bed, maybe let the fish/poem do that for you...

    surfacing just once-- and then goodnight.

    or some such.

    Tidy poem, and it warmed me to read it.
    | Posted on 2009-05-06 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      wow a poem about a poem which is about poetry itself. thats creative. kinda reminds me of some of those "unserious" writing exercises I do every now and then. I dont really see anything wrong it unless you wanna make it longer? naw...lol...ok. some people dont like to write long poems.

    I <3 creativity.
    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by siroez | [ Reply to This ]

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