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    dots Submission Name: Her Loverdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Her Lover

    There was no moment of silence

    No vacant half breathing of poignant momentum

    The falling stars could not entice from her heart

    Or burden a single second with the simplest ghost of import

    The open unwritten pages of her book left devoid of ink-ed blood

    She does not ponder on the swirling fogs
    It is those dank and drear mist which contemplate her

    Darkest expression of nothing

    Cold walled the clammy plaster and armour
    Iron shoveled and buried deep

    Never to dance all for smiles or walk from the island marooned

    No spark of life but vacant inspiration

    No tears other than those wept long ago
    Are now her only memories of sorrow

    It is cold now

    The words of passion and obsession
    Sleep with their talk on her tongue

    Her life undone
    Love she turned her back upon

    Love she walked away with uncaring grace
    And a high hand haughty wave

    With such a fire in her eyes un-kindled
    Un-eternal

    And shadow he watched her grey specter
    Of no avail his soul traveling with her
    There in the gnawing desolation of possibility
    She
    Left him




    Submitted on 2008-10-03 16:56:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was... spectacular! it holds the constant emotion all the way through, and it's absolutely heartbreaking, but i love it! well done, amazing imagery, great word usage :)
    | Posted on 2008-10-03 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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