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    dots Submission Name: Mountiansdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 359
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    As I look out from my window
    I see there are mountains for me to climb
    I would not much like to ignore them
    But there waiting there for me; all the time

    And though their boulders seem so trivial
    Their precipice so very narrow
    On the rocky slopes that I perceive
    Seem so very steep

    And there are mountains in my garden
    Mountains in my sleep
    These monoliths to my frustration
    These monuments to my belief
    Raise their convoluted flanks
    And excuse my lack of peace

    So I raise my eyes to dizzy heights
    Enveloped in confounding mist filled sides
    And brook no easy compromise
    And rather believe the truth has turned; to lies

    And though their tricky crags seem so petty
    It is cold determination which drives me
    To fathom every nook and cranny
    Of these mountains I choose; to climb

    Each foot I gain with conviction
    As I scale to the imperious point
    With the rattled landslide of berated argument
    And every pebble is turned so neatly; on its back

    And there are mountains in my shopping list
    Mountains in my coffee cup
    These confusing megaliths to insignificance
    These monuments to a principal
    Raise their candid flanks
    And excuse my lack of peace

    And there are mountains in my paper work
    Mountains every day
    Their spires and aspirations cloud my every vision
    These giants of my dissatisfaction
    Raise their procrastinated flanks
    To excuse my lack of peace

    Yet with unwarranted enthusiasm
    I shall dig at their very root
    With no intention left to climb them
    It is enough for me to believe; in their importance

    And through their very heart I shall burrow
    An excavation tunnelled without regard
    No worm or jewel shall deter me
    I shall dig, kick, crawl and claw at my desires only enemy

    I will prove to the world that mountains can be overcome
    I will stand triumphant even if it is blood I have to spill
    I shall burst into daylight from their hollow crown
    As triumphant as a mole; upon its hill

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      Wow Kudos to you, what a great write...
    a virtual rollercoaster of visual imagery

    Fantastic i loved it

    Timmy S. Edgar 2008
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]

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