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    dots Submission Name: EDGESdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 643
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    Description:
       ok as soem may know i am working on a book of my life's work have been forever hahahha i have posted soem stuff tat never got any help so i am reposting please be honest more then anything i wanna know if you GOT IT so to speak thanks.. angel


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    dotsEDGESdots
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    When everything shattered
    There was no one to hear the breaking
    No hand to shield
    No revenge
    The blood collected in cloudy pools
    The sound eventually returned
    The little world I made up is still there
    It waits
    Just outside sanity
    I can always go there
    Leave the anger here
    And find a corner
    Bury my face in my elbow
    count the seconds till the pain goes away
    It will stop
    it always does




    Submitted on 2008-10-04 01:35:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this one, you have such a way with words that I could never match, nice one my dear.


    Jamar2
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]


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