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    dots Submission Name: YOUdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Aghh again it eludes me ,this reality so unreal , she is dancing again , constant rhythm ,her hips ,even when I close my eyes they are there .she is framed in light . Crimson ,porcelain .perfect illusion. Lina ,her imperfect eyes .I want her near me, want her eyes to be blue her lips to have more color and yet I wouldn’t change her ,couldn’t .she is mine without ever knowing me

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      I like your work, you remind me of me.
    one page poetry.

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