Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: YOUdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 548
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 381



    Description:
       AGAIN A REPOST


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsYOUdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Aghh again it eludes me ,this reality so unreal , she is dancing again , constant rhythm ,her hips ,even when I close my eyes they are there .she is framed in light . Crimson ,porcelain .perfect illusion. Lina ,her imperfect eyes .I want her near me, want her eyes to be blue her lips to have more color and yet I wouldn’t change her ,couldn’t .she is mine without ever knowing me




    Submitted on 2008-10-04 01:42:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I like your work, you remind me of me.
    one page poetry.

    The Poor Mans' Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    166417

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Bond written by saartha
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Linger written by saartha
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    Summer written by layDsayD
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    To written by SavedDragon
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry