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    dots Submission Name: This is Who I Amdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 564
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1287



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    dotsThis is Who I Amdots
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    Writing words I don't understand
    With a pen wielded in my hand
    Fighting the demon in my head
    But lock behind my walls instead
    Voices echo with screaming rage
    With piercing lines I fill the page
    Wiping away with an eraser
    Mistakes I made on this paper

    Can you feel me?
    This is who I am
    Whispers across the sand
    Away into the wind
    This is who I am
    This is who I am

    I'm lying on the ground
    Inside this broken soul
    Wanting and trying to drown
    Self indulged by my dreaming
    Trying to never, ever fall down
    Reach inside me
    And feel this heart
    Beat ever faster, ever faster

    This is who I am
    This is who I am

    Please drag your hand across my skin
    Feel the scars hidden deep inside
    Open wounds that will never close
    This mask I ware as a disguise
    All the truths behind all the lies
    And the tears held behind these eyes
    A story written in my veins
    Of crippled tong and lashing pains

    Whispers across the sand
    Floating away forever
    Into the wind
    This is who I am
    This is who I am




    Submitted on 2008-10-04 02:22:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lovely piece , I really fell into this one, the first stanza was espacially meaningfull to me, I will fav this one.


    Jamar2
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by jamar2 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really cool i loved how it flowed it has the faint outline of possibly being a song honest deliver cards on the table cracker stuff, I love it well done keep it coming.

    Timmy S. Edgar 2008
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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