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    dots Submission Name: Hymn of Freedomdots
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    Author: col13x
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsHymn of Freedomdots
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    Hymn of Freedom

    The butterfly could not formulate glass
    it battered its flimsy wings
    freedom lay beyond
    still cruelly beckoning
    with the scent of flowers and open fields

    How like a god as I sat and watched
    implacable glass tearing delicate wings apart
    a choir sings to me
    immortal invisible
    I sat and let the butterfly die
    baked by heat and its struggle to be free




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      This reminds me a little of a haiku I once wrote about a moth trapped under a glass. I explored the same point in a briefer expanse; that is, the futility of finding freedom. I think this could be tweaked to be a little more insightful and deep, but for what it is it's well spoken and definitely thought provoking.
    | Posted on 2008-11-20 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]


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