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    dots Submission Name: Hymn of Freedomdots

    Author: col13x
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    dotsHymn of Freedomdots

    Hymn of Freedom

    The butterfly could not formulate glass
    it battered its flimsy wings
    freedom lay beyond
    still cruelly beckoning
    with the scent of flowers and open fields

    How like a god as I sat and watched
    implacable glass tearing delicate wings apart
    a choir sings to me
    immortal invisible
    I sat and let the butterfly die
    baked by heat and its struggle to be free

    Submitted on 2008-10-04 16:49:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminds me a little of a haiku I once wrote about a moth trapped under a glass. I explored the same point in a briefer expanse; that is, the futility of finding freedom. I think this could be tweaked to be a little more insightful and deep, but for what it is it's well spoken and definitely thought provoking.
    | Posted on 2008-11-20 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]

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