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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Want

    Still suckling tenderness whispers a vocal flesh amidst rumors
    blinded by a once native complicity
    ritual magic from solar passions bare foot in grass

    Hushing our name with sensual energies eclipsed
    turned skin to lithe silhouettes
    revealed in the thievery of our kiss

    Effortless fantasies wheeled to resonance
    naked playing in the crucible of desire
    vanquished suspense smiled for its intent
    wrapped excitement in a parchment of heat
    inhaling our name

    Soft lip rains hung damp on jungle air
    was our disguise our sanctuary there

    Confederate veils spun spells of soothing
    craved you with a wind racing through arterial canyons

    Predictability leading us to breathing in our name
    left us unstained in asking and murmuring in this way
    how weary the longing
    how vocal rumour becomes
    waiting amidst these beginnings of all this want in wanting




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