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    dots Submission Name: Breaking Pointdots
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    Author: col13x
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    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Breaking Point

    If you can slip
    measure the impassivity
    the curtain of insanity
    flaps in the wings
    a fluttering intonation of destiny

    Some where something says
    help is at hand

    Thick troll through
    daily role call
    and bust open at some point
    next to
    as you slip through trance
    a knife on the edge of your thought

    Hollow you call
    and some where something says
    help is at hand

    Out of depth
    as you struggle to find with bottomless boots
    a rock that could so easily be a shark
    following the scent of solitude

    Somewhere something
    says help is at hand
    and the glass trembles as you swallow
    been there
    done that
    bought the T shirt




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