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    dots Submission Name: The Grey Armydots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    The Grey Army

    Could we see
    the sad banners of the grey army
    could we hear
    their poignant lament
    as the cold winds of sorrow
    blew its tattered way through
    the faces of this host of our tomorrow

    Was it there in the ever decreasing distance
    we heard their murmur and the shuffle
    as they rode on the cadaverous horse backs of today
    could we see in the diminishing sunlight
    that on the bed of love
    is where their ragged and forlorn flags of regret
    would lay

    Could we see them waiting and beckoning
    with their aim to haunt the future
    to frequent the eyes and smiles
    of anyone else's name

    With each torn and separate day they marched
    these grey ghouls approaching
    could we not feel their desperate desolation
    in the vibrations beneath our marrow's
    the great grey steeds that thundered leisurely
    to the place where we would never meet
    again




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