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    dots Submission Name: Angelsdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Angels ( For Claire )

    Is it any wonder that angels cry
    they have countenanced this earthly masquerade of heaven
    to be human
    with the flesh of mankind
    acquit the torments of love and never understand why

    Angels belong with another division of humanity
    where the beatitudes and the sorrows
    are sipped from the cups of their fellows
    tasting the throes of their graces
    the hopes of their longings

    To be the soothing kiss of laughter in our woe
    the lament of sadness behind the eyes of happiness
    the music of suffering and peace
    to savour and be with the soul of all souls
    they walk with ultimate love among us

    And yet they may never discern their state
    as they carry the crosses and burdens
    while etching the trials and jubilance
    in the chronicle of time
    with their sacrifice of forgetfulness
    as angels they gave up the ecstasy of heaven
    to walk with unending love among us

    Is it any wonder that angels cry
    is it any wonder that angels die
    unable to contain the sweetness and the grief of the waltz of life
    is it any wonder that we hear them laughing and calling
    from the soul of all souls
    in the miracle of their mission
    they walk with acceptance and without judgment
    with eternal love
    amongst us

    Is it any wonder that we never know who we really are
    when the anguish and the delights of our equals
    touches the unquestioning love inside us

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      Now this is what I am talking about. Perfect write. Loved it. The description and images was so clear and vivid I could see the angels walking. You made you point across from the beginning.

    I bet Claire is a very lucky girl for you even put her name in the beginning of the poem instead of just in the description that most people overlook. I wonder if perhaps you are a churchgoer for you seem to pertain knowledge of angels that others perhaps would not. I feel that to you Claire is the angel in the poem. Perhaps I am wrong, but the idea seems to fit better than others.
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]

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