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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Broken Back

    They use words like
    Cold
    And
    Crossing
    Sighs
    To describe something romanticised

    Obscured verbs
    In which to hide
    To hide
    Romanticized
    The suffering
    Without a name

    It asks you not to worry
    A vacant voice
    Verbalised
    Tears
    She cried
    Lies

    Nomenclature of disheartening
    Hope
    Borrowed between shadows
    Between hearts
    Flowers
    And chocolates

    At peace
    At last
    Unburdened
    Released
    Love
    Child

    Romanticized
    To a field of waving poppies
    Gently shook the rifles
    And slow blood let
    Picturesque

    And before God
    Such cruelty breathes animate
    Stand
    Brave
    Courageous
    Fool

    Dancing in the rain
    The paupers smile
    Romanticized smile
    Of a rich divide
    To beggar belief

    And itís easy
    So very easy
    To explain away
    How life
    Is just made this way

    They use words like
    Freedom
    Romanticized acceptance
    Short words
    Of description
    To present an illusion
    Of perfection

    The good die young
    It could happen to anyone
    But only the good die young
    Young
    Children
    Anyone

    God
    Space
    Illusion
    Nothing to prove
    Romantic death
    Of death
    Who bides his time
    In skeletal black cloth
    And bargains away
    In celluloid
    The faces we canít forget
    Those who told us
    We would never regret
    Anything

    The break scape
    The big escape
    A monumental world of landscape
    And freedom
    Beyond mountains
    Beyond worlds
    Beyond words
    Romanticized




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