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    dots Submission Name: Passiondots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 338
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsPassiondots
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    Passion

    Yet is but a breath
    Let to fall on a lovers neck
    Where craving in blood
    Pulses

    Obsession in a forced embrace
    In a strangled moan
    A whimper
    Inside a caress

    Yet is but sweat
    Heat born by skin
    And desire born in a kiss
    Is a language unspoken

    Written by finger tips
    On arching breasts
    Held between open legs
    And nails tracing a vocal scratch

    Tender brutality
    Animal beast and heavenly
    A millennium imprinted
    In a single touch

    Words that will not break
    Upon a gasp
    A sigh that will cling
    To every second

    Eyes that burn
    With passion
    Eyes that burn
    With wanting
    Eyes that burn
    With love

    Driven
    To where desire holds communion
    Aching for more
    Sweet passion

    Yet excitement will not lay satisfied
    And ponder the next
    And another time
    To gather and relinquish release

    Yet is but a soft breath
    Let to fall with verbs of a breath
    Anticipation asked to inspire
    I will colour the fire in your eyes





    Submitted on 2008-10-04 20:53:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "Driven
    To where desire holds communion"
    Unh that part right there set my mind on fire lit me up for real! There was so much lust and burning in it. I get the yets.... you could easily substitute the words: thus far for the first second and last yet and the word nevertheless for the third yet and it all jives just the same. HOT
    | Posted on 2008-10-06 00:00:00 | by bigohhh1 | [ Reply to This ]
      not sure if all teh yets belong i get the heat in it but not the full context
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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