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    dots Submission Name: The Far Less Childdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Far Less Childdots

    The Far Less Child

    It was not through muscle flesh or sinew
    Or through thought
    It did not come from aching joints or from slow pulse of blood
    Nor from silence or from heavy eyes did it come

    A tiredness
    A weariness that went beyond breath or lung
    Went on to permeate and suffuse entirely
    Seemingly all that I am
    It issued and filled and dispersed from my heart
    From my heart
    This jaded and solemn pall did come

    As cold I sat without reason
    Unable to trace a moment of truth and warmth
    As if all in moments of love had passed
    Leaving me void, empty and barren

    I could not recall any moment of happiness
    That had not been tainted
    No smile that was given
    That was not filled with lies and delusion
    While all those dreams and wishes were swept away
    And hope relented

    All the more the silence echoed
    Into the vacant space at my side
    Through a slow single beat
    Was this ennuiís rhythm birthed
    To leave me in a world peopled and populace
    In a night and day of communion and converse
    I sat frozen
    And alone

    There was no belief that had not been betrayed
    No joy in creation
    No exhilaration in knowing deity
    All I touched became a misused and broken heart
    And my soul wept
    As this aching sadness swept
    Through my veins

    There was nothing to crave, nothing to do
    Accept plead for a moment of peace
    A moment of peace

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      i also read your other entry and im not liking it i love the actual words i mean there is talent for sure i never really get it wich is fine keepin em guessing maybe soemthing shorter would help id love you to let me know when you post more so i can keep reading
    | Posted on 2008-10-04 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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