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    dots Submission Name: “For I Love Him Not”dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots“For I Love Him Not”dots

    “For I Love Him Not”

    And God said
    “He shall not realize
    “I will not open his eyes
    “Nor give him love
    “Nor give him peace
    “Nor grant him one single wish
    “For I love him not”

    And God said
    “This man is nothing to me
    “He does not deserve pity
    “Or mercy
    “He deserves nothing that creation can offer
    “To make him truly happy
    “For I love him not”

    And God said
    “What is this pathetic creature
    “This creation does not come from me
    “Let him lay in the tracts of abuse
    “Let him remain stymied
    “Let him thirst and hunger
    “For I love him not”

    And God said
    “Let life pass him by I care not
    “For I have no compassion for him
    “So let him live without light or love
    “Leave him to his struggle
    “Leave him to his questions
    “For I love him not”

    And God said
    “Give him no wealth
    “Let him be shackled and tormented by me
    “Let him mourn that which he never had
    “Break his heart and his soul
    “Let the fucking bastard bleed
    “For I love him not”

    And God said
    “Let him drown in the sickness
    “Let him see and then aspire to heaven
    “But never in this life or the next; never let him in
    “Let him grovel as the blind………….
    And then God said

    “For I love him above all other creation”

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      Wow that is quite full on... Personally I myself am not religious yet i respect all religion.

    In saying that; this was for me, quite hard to read as I was feeling desperately for "The one who is He that God love's not" I guess i was thinking that he deserves another crack.

    Then i read the last line and smiled.

    Great stuff from you :)

    Timmy S. Edgar © 2008

    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope, dear Col, you speak not of yourself in this rant and rave about God. For life is hard to many human beings, but that does not mean God has left their side or loves them not.

    God did not say he would come on this Earth and grant us a perfect life or be in plain sight every moment. He said we must live our lives for ourselves and make our own mistakes. We will suffer, we will be punished for things beyond our control it seems, but it is not so. God does not punish the innocent. Man punishes the innocent.

    I hope perhaps you hear what I say instead of feeling disgust, anger, or just plain disbelief. I do like this one although. For normally I tend to like ones that have rhythm, but this one has a specialness of it's own to compensate for my like.

    It was wonderfully written and the sequence was perfect in each paragraph. There is one part that seemed to throw off the rest though. It was the part that God said...

    “Break his heart and his soul
    “Let the [censored] [censored] bleed
    “For I love him not”

    For the rest, although hateful, seemed to be spoken by a superior being. I do not quite see God saying "Let the [censored] [censored] bleed". It seems unrealistic. Well, many churchgoers would say the rest seemed unrealistic, but the [censored] part is by far the most unreal.

    If anything it should just be...

    "Let the [censored] bleed".

    Overall, it was wonderful. It is your choice if you would like to change it. If not it still sounds wonderful. Excellent write.
    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]

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