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    dots Submission Name: Parasite ( The Long Man )dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Parasite ( The Long Man )

    Sucking on the teeth
    the succulent hanging meat
    of congenital fortune
    hangs fat on fat big lipped and bloated
    by lack of over exertion

    Slopping a grin of self satisfaction
    the dribble of comfort
    the knowing closed shutter of abuse
    weighs as a mound of flaccid skin
    supported by the working man

    Cream it will be
    before poverty
    all and all without worry
    while swallowed pride fills the belly
    and sweat so sipped to savour
    the flavour of usury

    All the trappings accompaniments
    shotgun and hunt
    the sport of kings
    the mindless pastimes of the clueless and soulless
    with nothing to do but suck on the meat
    of congenital fortune
    hangs fat on fat bibbed lipped and bloated
    by lack of over exertion




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