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    dots Submission Name: The Forestdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Forestdots

    The Forest ( for fimp )

    And sweep in summer dreams
    The fallen leaves of your sighs
    For even lives no not even words will impart
    The gathered aspirations of your soul
    And no one will ever know

    They will not see where your hand was so tenderly lain
    Or catch by a portrait the trace of your smile
    Who wonders for the soft light of your eyes
    To ponder the thoughts you hold
    And no one will ever know

    Was it a soft embrace that sought you
    In that heart and those arms so bereft to take you
    In one night of heat lays his shadow
    When he softly whispered “No”.
    And who will ever know

    Yet the line is imagined should it dare to be crossed
    With bare feet beneath the hem of your skirt
    Between flowers step such woolgatherings
    Such hopeful and wishing fantasies
    Still he will never know

    So caught in the while away for the hours
    As the wings of truth beat between your breath
    More than a world is held in the touch of your finger
    More than love can imagine
    No stranger was he to such reveries
    In sleepless winds when he called your name
    But for the expectation of another verdant meadow
    The forest will never know

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       col13x Another cracker of a write what a word smith you are wow i loved the imagery in this piece what a treat again i chose this one because of its name and again i am blown away...Well Done

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    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i like i really do reminds me of a lil night long ago hehhehehehhh(blush) this seems alittle diffrent then wsome of you work and i like that i try to comment on thing others havent casue i hate when i post and noone comments on certain ones ..layD
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]

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