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    dots Submission Name: My Nightmaredots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.47 - 99/55/49
    Words: 425
    Class/Type: Story/Love
    Total Views: 630
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2255



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       As if being back in school was a bad dreem in it's self.


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    dotsMy Nightmaredots
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    I stood there, staring into my locker. There on the bottom was the letter that I wrote her, and how it got there I donít know. Sighing I shut the door, behind it was her with icy tears melting down her face. She looked at me with questioning eyes and a slap that meant forget it. Staring after her as she turned and walked down the hall and around the corner, I dropped what ever I had in my hands and ran after her. As I turned the corner I stopped and looked around. There was nothing but vacant halls and empty rooms.
    For no reason a taste of salt from a drop of water, after flowing down my face, seeped into my mouth only to realize that I was crying. She was no where in sight. Fear of not seeing her again creped into my head causing my legs to weaken, dropping me to my knees. I berried my head into my hands crying like Iíve never have before. I threw my head up toward the ceiling howling like a wolf toward the moon. Then suddenly fell to the ground.
    (Blink) I was suddenly able to see myself lying on the ground with eyes closed. She came running to me on the ground shaking me trying to open those deep set eyes that had water streams flowing down the drenched cheeks. Feeling hopelessly lost she sat there staring as she started to cry.
    (Blink) I watched and followed myself as they rolled me out to the emergency vehicle. There they pulled out a heat monitor and connected it to my chest to hear my heart beat. It beeped a few times, then slower and slower until suddenly it became flat. I watched as they took out the defibrillator and pressed two pads against my body, sending jolts of electricity threw my body. But my body stilled laid there dead. I turned my head and saw her standing by the door hugging herself, crying with endless tears.
    (Blink) I stood there holding myself looking toward the bed where she laid. The heart monitor still giving the flat noise, so they unplugged it with her dead where I was suppose to be. To see her there like that made my body ach, my muscles tensing up. And with overwhelming pain my head lifted to the sky and with a piercing shrill everyone began to shake all feeling it the depths of there bones where my pain had resided for Iíll never see her again.




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      Crikey that was full on; that had me from start to finish. i like the intensity that you write with, if i were to be picky i would say be mindful of spelling and fine tune your structure yet above all that you are a very talented and descriptive writer i am going to read more of your material thank you.

    Timmy S. Edgar © 2008
    | Posted on 2008-10-05 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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