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    dots Submission Name: The Notedots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 848
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    Description:
       Sequel to Merry Christmas and the end of the trilogy, read the first 2 first, starts with Here I Go!!!


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    dotsThe Notedots
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    So here's my explanation
    Written in my own blood
    You'll see it as retardation
    When you see from what I've run

    I'm leaving them behind
    Evil memories that plague me
    They were all inside my mind
    So none of you could do the saving

    I couldn't take it anymore
    The voices or the blame
    So now I lay upon the floor
    Next to a bright and flickering flame

    My heart no longer has a beat
    Forever I'll be still
    Whomever this note perchance may meet
    Remember, this was my will

    I'm sorry for the choice of day
    You all should be celebrating
    But there couldn't be another delay
    My sanity was quickly erasing

    Eventually you'll att just smile
    Nod or shake your heads
    Having sent me down the Nile
    What use was I to you dead?

    Don't worry, I forgive you
    I can see where you're coming from
    I'd do the same to you
    If I'd had just as much rum

    Like the blade I chose to use
    You're young and fairly witted
    I was just a pre-lit fuse
    Who'd decided on a quick visit

    Don't bother making sure
    I know I've done it right
    My blood may be no longer pure
    But I put up one hell of a fight!




    Submitted on 2008-10-05 19:52:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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