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    dots Submission Name: I See and Do Not Believedots
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    Author: Elissar
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 32/28/14
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 784
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1105



    Description:
       This is a poem that I wrote with the first things that came to mind.
    I don't know if any of it will make sense to you, but I thought I'd post it just for kicks and giggles if for nothing else.


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    dotsI See and Do Not Believedots
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    I see and do not believe.

    Jokers, fables, lies,
    Imaginations running wild.

    My life, my freedom,
    My keep, my hold,
    Nuances too great to understand.

    Gestures and ridicule shape
    My choice. Departing upon
    The cloud of knowledge,
    Under a dark haze

    Where heartbreak occurs
    At random intervals.
    My eye does rove
    Upon the unsuspecting land.
    Nine heads upon the horizon
    Peering back at me.

    Wander you may,
    But never will you leave our
    Gaze, whispers float to me.
    Me who trudges beyond the end
    Of the world. Past mountains of joy
    And rivers of sorrow, heaps
    Of jealously and rage.

    Simmer my dear, and truth
    Will be yours. Doubt, and fear cloud
    My mind. Idiosyncrasy labels upon
    My brow, begrudging resentment
    Building upon my shoulders. Heavy,
    Heavy, heavy… heavier still till
    I can no longer breath.
    Yet death, is too distant to hope.





    Submitted on 2008-10-06 23:36:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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