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    dots Submission Name: My Dear Frienddots
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    Author: Lostlover
    ASL Info:    18/male/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 96/99/53
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Not meant to be serious...i am not really an alcoholic but i thought this would be a fun poem to write and to try and get inside one's head.


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    dotsMy Dear Frienddots
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    It is raining outside today
    Like a frightened pup I seek
    My heart’s warm desires
    “Mr. Daniels please come.”
    “Jack, my dear friend, it has been too long.”
    I need your loving embrace
    And your ever comforting presence

    I systematically move through my day
    Methodically waiting for the meltdown
    I know it is bound to come
    And when it does….
    I know my dear friend will be waiting
    To take me to places
    Where I can forget even my name
    Deep into the piercing darkness
    Of the encumbering night

    If I am to wake
    It is with ache of him gone
    And with a day where I must slave—
    To a world that would sooner
    Hate me than love me
    Please let me go home
    I miss you Jack Daniels





    Submitted on 2008-10-07 05:02:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My Friend as an ex drug addict I have got to admit this is one of the best writes on alcoholism I have read in awhile
    I also find it amazing you say you dont have that problem
    If you are being honest about that then my friend you are quite the genious
    The words match perfectly and one can easily feel the pain and alcoholic feels yearning for that next drink
    My drug of choice wasnt alcohol it was crystal meth and by the Grace of God I have been clean for 4 years and will never and I do mean never go back to that life
    It was 5 long sheer years of nothing but bitter insanity
    AMAZING WORK!!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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