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    dots Submission Name: An Impromtu Mornings Coffee Breakdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    An Impromptu Mornings Coffee Break

    Coffee what a blessing
    dark strong and sweet
    first thing in the morning
    6.30 am caffeine hit
    takes me an hour to wake up
    so I need it

    Now where is my head
    Jeez its hard to focus on this screen
    Oh its still sleeping on my bed
    come here head
    time to wake up
    stop complaining

    I love that sky colour
    indigo through my window
    so lucid
    an almost neon dawn
    but brighter somehow
    reminds me of sleep

    Stop thinking of sleep

    The birds are waking up
    I imagine them like me
    drinking coffee
    and spluttering on their first cigarette
    dreams hangover still fuzzling
    cob webbing

    Caffeine, ah its working
    my head just thought of day planning
    next phase ready
    shower and shave
    dog walking
    indigo beginning to fade
    sun rising

    Good morning
    now I have to be going

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      Does poetry really need a reason? or insane depth? Does it need a deeper meaning than what is presented on the surface, or have to describe a life changing event? That is my question. poetry is a showcase of emotion, of thought. Not all thoughts and/or emotions have to be deep and meaningful. Simplicity can sometimes be the most refreshing thing in the world.

    I thought this poem had a sense of half-awakeness, caused by the lack of punctuation and random breaks. I am glad it is broken up the way it is, or else i would have run out of breath just reading it in my head.

    I love poems about Coffee. Coffee always puts me in a better mood in the morning. And for some reason poems about coffee do the same thing.

    And oh my, do i sympathize when it comes to not being able to get up in the morning...my bed was so warm this morning, i DID NOT want to get up. ^_^ needless to say I was a bit late getting out of the house this morning.

    I liked it immensely, it was refreshing after all the 'deep' poetry I've seen lately. Kind of like a cup of coffee.

    Keep writing, you have a great style.


    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by CourtneyLynne | [ Reply to This ]
      There seems not important purpose to this poem. Basically, it's just you talking about needing your morning caffeine hit after possibly a long night out partying and now a hangover or just not enough sleep in general. Although, I sympathize with you for I myself rarely get enough sleep seeing as I work five days a week plus still go to school.

    Perhaps, you were also just talking about the addiction one can have for caffeine. Although, just so you know if you ever drink coffee when you have a hangover to get it out of your system thats the wrong way. Coffee is a stimulant and alcohol a depressant so you'd think you'd be canceling out the alcohol, right? Wrong. All it does it take the alcohol longer to leave your system. Just a bit of info...

    The poem had good descriptions and vivid images, but it did not capture me like some do. I'm not saying it is bad, I am just saying not necessarily my type. There doesn't seem to be much background driving for this poem. Any life changing event or singular purpose for it. Just seems like you wanted to write so you did. Which can be a good thing, trust me.

    I just wonder what the real reason for it is...? Hmm?
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]

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