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    dots Submission Name: Walk away, Turn around, and Hit rewinddots
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    Author: ThisIsReal
    ASL Info:    22-M-Lost
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 182/194/88
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Kinda hit a new point in my life and I've revised the way I write a bit. This is the first of my new style poetry, and it's a good window into my thoughts without sugarcoating and ryming and such.


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    dotsWalk away, Turn around, and Hit rewinddots
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    what do you do
    when you have all you've saught
    only to find it unwanted?
    Hold it tight,
    in honor of the effort?
    Or do you cry
    for the time that is lost?
    Or could you suck it up
    and just walk away?
    Just walk away.
    I'd just walk away

    In another time,
    when you reach your trail's end,
    to find that where you were going
    only lies behind you,
    do you take a break
    and rest your weary feet?
    Or look around
    for a new path to wander?
    Maybe curse yourself
    and then turn around?
    Just turn around?
    I've turned around.

    When you find in heartbreak
    that you've left it behind
    in the story of your past,
    do you keep watching,
    waiting for it to return?
    Maybe call it quits,
    and end the story?
    Or,
    hardest of all,
    swall your pride
    and hit rewind?
    Just hit rewind.
    Where's that button?
    Where is THAT button?!




    Submitted on 2008-10-07 17:45:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. A lot.

    "what do you do
    when you have all you've saught
    only to find it unwanted?
    Hold it tight,
    in honor of the effort?
    Or do you cry
    for the time that is lost?
    Or could [censored] it up
    and just walk away?
    Just walk away.
    I'd just walk away"

    I bet a lot of people can relate to that part.
    I know I can. It reminds me of many people in my life that I've tried hard to get to or whatever and than when I reach my goal I'm still not happy and I don't want what I worked so hard for. And in the end I usually walk away. I'd just walk away.

    This is a really great piece and I look forward to reading more from you.

    -Elissa :)
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by KillSpoon | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...I must say this is different then your other works of art! I like it. I like how its ended! But why would you want to rewind the past and go through the pain again?
    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by Bloodlust86 | [ Reply to This ]
      You should read the poem "If" by Rudyard Kipling, if you haven't already. This poem has a fluttering resemblance to that poem. The humor at the end sort of...spoils this for me. It was a wonderful emotion and you just brought in that all caps "?!" and it was like the emotion turned to concrete and dropped from my chest to my pelvis.


    But to each his or her own, I suppose. I'm sure someone else will find that little humor enjoyable.
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by Renč Magrete | [ Reply to This ]
      thoughts...

    this is what your piece brings up for me...

    my father taught me to be thankful for what I have and thankful for what I don't have and don't want...

    There will always be times of wanting things, getting them, and realizing; do I really want this? do I really need this? Is this what I was really looking for? Somewhere along the way we garner a knowledge of what really is important. Those things that bring some semblance of worth and happiness and a general contenment for what is... not what could be, what should be. Sometimes I have an idea about having certain things (material and not) a dream maybe, a fantasy even... and I do what I do trying to acheive that want, desire, goal... and when I reach it, I always expect that it will be what I had in my head about it... and it rarely is. So there is always this sense of disappointment... in myself (usually). I really try (try) not to have expectations.

    When it comes to matters of the heart... I always hit rewind... to a point. I won't give up. I will try because it is about the heart. But I find I have to let such things go at some point... because no matter what I want things to be, I have no control over the situation....

    I know you asked for thoughts and not advise... but again, this is what came up for me when I read your words.

    I haven't read any of your other work, so I can't compare the styles...

    I just think they are good questions to ask oneself. I don't know if I felt that there was neccessarily a deepness here or that emotion was dripping off the page... I mean it didn't feel like there was anything to sugarcoat here... but the questions, again, are interesting enough to ponder...
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]



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