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    dots Submission Name: Not Realdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 262/263/207
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 124
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1146



    Description:
       I told everyone I would start writing about something else, and I did, it only took a couple weeks.

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    dotsNot Realdots
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    My heart is still connected
    to someone else,
    yet it's slowly leaving toward you.
    You're making me realize
    that I do deserve better,
    that I don't deserve
    most of the things I deal with.
    It may seem childish,
    but I want to run my hands
    through your hair.
    I want to caress your face,
    I want to kiss your lips.
    I don't want to say anything because
    I'm already in a relationship.
    Eventually, my heart will leave him,
    and if it does stay with you,
    how do I know you won't
    do the same he's done to me?
    He's shattered my heart
    numerous times,
    yet I fix it so he can break it again.
    I know I need to end it,
    but I'm afraid to try
    to start a new relationship.
    But then I see you,
    and that's all I want.
    I can imagine bringing you home
    and introducing you to my family.
    I can see us sitting outside,
    your arms wrapped around me.
    I can see all these things,
    but they're not real yet.




    Submitted on 2008-10-07 20:21:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this is a great write. Very simple and very easy to read, yet you touch on some of the hardest and deepest emotions people ever have to deal with.
    It is obvious that you are either a brilliant writer who does not need to edit their work, or a meticulous editor. Either way thank you for making it easy to read, and not have to suffer through unedited matieral. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by Lostlover | [ Reply to This ]


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