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    dots Submission Name: You Are My Sweetest Downfalldots
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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYou Are My Sweetest Downfalldots
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    Your strength was about you, I was the source.
    I needed you to watch the stars with me.
    I don't know when I began to realize
    that those stars were just old light.
    You are my sweetest downfall.
    We didn't make history,
    I loved you, my first.
    The magic slipped beneath our fingers,
    And when the beauty of what was shone bright,
    we covered our eyes.
    You are my sweetest downfall




    Submitted on 2008-10-07 20:55:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sad and perfect i loved this you have talent im sur eof that and it s like you breath it good work ..layD
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes when we have it, we still don't see it. Sad, lovely write, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2008-10-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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