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    dots Submission Name: Bound <sex>dots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Bytes: 320



    Description:
       For all: "God" is a word used to represent a very loose concept in this poem; a word with a special meaning to me and someone else. Not as interpreted in it's common definition.

    Mostly for him: This is very minimalistic for as long in coming as it has been. It will remain so. I believe it's the clearest representation I'm ever going to come to the emotions, though not the most beautiful.


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    dotsBound <sex>dots
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    Every time you drive away, you take a little more of Me,
    Smoke kicks up,
    More of a shell you leave,
    Am I absorbing you or are you destroying me?

    Break my heart again and my self may not restore,
    Because you’re right,
    We are bound now,
    By GOD forevermore.




    Submitted on 2008-10-08 03:19:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This made me hurt inside. It made me think of an old fling I had. Neither of us could make it work. Wording was kinda a vague and it was on the short side. But it did invoke feeling and that is a strongsuit. Nice
    | Posted on 2008-10-08 00:00:00 | by bigohhh1 | [ Reply to This ]


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