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    dots Submission Name: My Walk With God Todaydots
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    Author: Flowerinbloom
    ASL Info:    22/M/Earth (I think)
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 700/559/123
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Religious
    Total Views: 807
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 285



    Description:
       I strolled through the park with God today, he's a faster walker than I.


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    dotsMy Walk With God Todaydots
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    Like a candle in the darkness
    I walk to you
    Hoping you lead me
    to the person you want me to be
    But the journey is long
    And too hard for me to travel
    I linger behind you
    Till I stop walking entirely
    And you wander off without me.




    Submitted on 2008-10-08 22:06:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The wording of it warrants it a kind of reverence and the shortness gives you just enough time to appreciate it and connote to your own religious ponderings. Thank you.

    Correy
    | Posted on 2009-01-10 00:00:00 | by AnotherNobody | [ Reply to This ]
      That is gorgeous. When I saw God in the title, I admit I was a little worried that I wouldn't appreciate this the way I should, but I was wrong. Unlike most religious things, I actually enjoyed the subject. It takes a lot of talent to open a closed-minded individual, and that's exactly what you have done here. I love it. The wording is perfect and artistic. I admire you.
    So I guess, as usual, I can give nothing but compliments.
    You're brilliant.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2008-10-13 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      the flwo this had was amazing and its shortness was so nessassery (excus ei cant spell tonight lol) but i am so glad i came upon this it reminds me of a symbolic walk i took once with my mother befor e she died good work i will check back and read more ..layD
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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