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Wedding Pain


Author: Lynda
ASL Info:    26/F
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Words: 110
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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So happy for my best friends wedding, but I cried more for myself than for her.


Wedding Pain



the lace covers her eyes
but i can see that she's happy
his hand trembles alone
but only until it folds into hers
my two best friends
at the alter in front of hundreds
but alone when they look at each other
i watch from the left hand of the bride
so happy, but so sad at the same time
it's their day
but i can't help but feel sorry for myself
because i know i'm so far away from
building anything close to what they have
i can't be scared anymore
to find what they have
to face the potential of pain
but pray for the potential of love




Submitted on 2008-10-09 00:49:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liekd this everyone smiles at wedding and i always wonder what they are really feeling good work i want to read more of your stuff keep posting them ..layD
| Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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