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    Author: robertbwell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Wyoming
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 92/150/75
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    My eyes are vacant now, holding no hope for a soul that dreams,
    beneath a barren heaven, among the trodden where the willows weep,
    where softness is but a sweet memory of a sense that has long collapsed,
    into the void that surrounds we angels, draining from us our past

    Had I my wings and heart and strength enough to climb
    I would make my way back to you and keep your eyes in mine
    for they are the hope that holds this soul; a figure that crumbles as it speaks
    they are what dreams are for, and every reason for me to sleep”





    Submitted on 2008-10-09 04:12:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you should expand on this piece (if you can)
    | Posted on 2009-09-09 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.....this is perfect, the 3rd and 4th lines particularly.
    | Posted on 2009-09-09 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]


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