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    dots Submission Name: Mistreateddots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.62 - 96/51/46
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
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    There's a part of me missing, fighting, loosing control
    Loosing my grip on the edge of this world
    loosing my sense of reality
    Please don't look in my eyes
    please see threw me
    Pretend I don't exist and let me be
    All you'll see in these eyes is an empty dream
    No reason to keep going
    all more reason to scream
    (in this game they call life)

    Do my words feel meaningless
    do they seem vacant?
    Blame it on my exhaustion
    my life's feeling spent

    Reach out and touch me please,
    hold my hand
    you'll find that I'm just an empty shell
    Just moving along
    Everything done to me
    all that has changed my life
    doesn't seem right
    But nothing feels wrong
    When the heart was worm
    it would never bleed
    No reason to hurt
    always willing to succeed
    But now my veins are empty
    and the heart is frozen cold
    My soul is dieing
    and my minds ready to fold
    (in this game they call life)

    Do my words feel meaningless
    do they seam vacant?
    Blame it on my exhaustion
    my life's feeling spent

    For once look up and out among the ocean of stars
    Where I used to feel home
    Every night that no one was listening
    As I crawl threw anguish feeling all alone

    For once see that the stars are fallen and fading away
    As I let down my walls to my world for you to stay,
    Because when you leave me
    you wont give back what I gave
    Making me lonely, making me empty.
    (in this game they call life)






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      I really like this, it is interesting and meaningful. Can't think of much to say really that is my thoughts on it ^_^

    Keep up all the good work and I look forward to reading more of your things. Thanks for sharing.

    ~ <3 ~ Nix ~ <3 ~
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by NixLacus | [ Reply to This ]


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