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    dots Submission Name: Seethingdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
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    dotsSeethingdots
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    I AM GOD,
    was born a man
    Can’t wake up
    remember who I am
    ALL IS WRONG
    and I can’t make right,
    Can’t wake up
    fallen from the light…

    and if I need you
    I will push you away!(away)
    Can’t see through you
    so instead you decay
    I scream “I love you”
    but, don’t make a sound
    I swear I see you,
    lying, 6 feet under-ground

    I Am God
    but, feel a man
    All is Gone
    fell through my hands

    And if I love you
    will I push you away?
    Scream, and see through you
    still you decay?
    if I still need you
    will you not make a sound
    I swear I see you
    lying, 6 feet under-ground…

    I am man
    was born a god
    spill my blood
    but it’s not enough
    I wake up
    fallen from the light
    All is gone
    and I can’t make right
    …..
    Was it all really
    just in my hand?
    …wont wake up
    To remember who I am!




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      Just like the first time I read it, this still screams manson-ish to me in intent, but a little more....hm...smashing pumpkins? in actual execution. sorry for the references, just trying to give you an idea of what it sort of seems like-you know of course, there's no comparing you to anyone :). in intent or otherewise :P

    This seems even more sad to me than some of your more obviously mournful writing; even as being (or simply seeing) himself as god, he can't right the things that are with him. An interesting idea, yet apparently incomprehensible to a lot of people, that a god could be more tormented and struck with pain than any other being. It's interesting too, just a slight conflict of desires? or uncertainty even?

    the longing to see oneself as above needing anyone or anything- so much so that anyone wanted or needed would have to be pushed away- yet the unwanted acknowledgement that none of that needing will ever go away. not even 6 feet underground.

    would it offend you at all if I said this was beautiful? in the most tragic way possible, of course.

    I love you angel, and despite your god complex, we have to remember being god would be no fun :P

    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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