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    dots Submission Name: This Price I Paydots
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    Author: Lostlover
    ASL Info:    18/male/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 96/99/53
    Words: 277
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 699
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    Description:
       This piece is something that I have been thinking about writing today, and I have realpoet, from this website for reminding to do it.


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    dotsThis Price I Paydots
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    Name any price,
    And please do not hesitate
    I can handle all you could ask.
    Music, take from me what you will
    For to me you are worth it.

    If you require me to live on the streets,
    A battered old man,
    Reeking with the stench of homelessness,
    Then I would give it,
    If only I could know your sweet sounds.

    If my only shelter was to be by the guise of begging
    And my only food from disease infected leftovers
    If I am to be with you, then I cordially accept.
    But please, know that I cannot live a life without you.

    Above all, you require uncertainty
    I will have no job,
    Except for what you will graciously provide,
    And perhaps only God knows that date when you will come calling.
    But even then, I have certainty that I will pay this price.

    When you have the passion, my dearest music,
    When desire speaks for you to be heard,
    And you seek for someone to do your bidding,
    I ask only one favor in return for this price I pay;
    That when the time comes for your glory to shine,
    That you do not forget about the homeless man,
    Who reeks of the stench of troubled times,
    Who has no home, and no job,
    Who was given all he has, so he might have just one thing,
    That you would call upon him,
    And trust that he will, after all he has sacrificed,
    Uphold your wondrous and inexplicable being
    Have faith, my companion,
    I have let go of too much to see you defiled at my cost.




    Submitted on 2008-10-09 17:40:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a passionate write...
    the last line especially brings home the message with a powerful punch...
    | Posted on 2008-10-14 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm happy that I could inspire you and thanks for the mention. While reading this write around 10:30 pm. EDT, I had a mental icture of you playing a tuba. I thought for sure I had read the word (tuba ). I searched for it in your write but could not find tuba. Were you playing a musical instrument at that time?
    I like the way you talked to music as if it were a person. Actually it is since it echoes the vibes made by the musician.
    I also like your dedication to music even if it makes you pay the price of losing all for it . Many of the great composers of the medieval era relied on pennies thrown into their begging cups and look what happened. They soon found themselves playing before kings and great appreciative audiences. The public knows good music when they hear it.
    | Posted on 2008-10-10 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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